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Creative Writing 101: Sunset

Describe a sunset as viewed by a character that is in bliss; describe the same sunset but this time as seen by a character that is in gloom.

A mixture of blood and smoke scattered beyond the vast firmament of
heaven.. Dispersed in malformed glorious clouds; half part is
sprinkled in snow and the other part of wine and of rubies and of
sunflowers. Celestial lavishness corrupts me. Stars reach me.  I
closed my eyes. And still, I see hues and phantasm. I am in bliss.

The dusk, a thief, stole everything. It painted the sky selfishly.
Smothered the sun with something heavy. With something so heavy, it
decided to free its fall and be swallowed by the sea. As the sun
slumber on its grave, the night cloaks the earth and my vision
darkened. It was gloomy.

While reading a book at a library slash book store, I came upon a creative writing composition. It has lots of exercises and tips on creative writing. One of the exercises include fleshing out a stranger you have seen the first time. Compose stories about that stranger and why he is on that place. And a lot more exercises. While at work, I answered this exercise where I have to describe the same sunset as seen by a happy and a sad person for five minutes (squeezing my writing ability to its boundary in a time constraint manner). Next time, I’ll try this creative writing again with different rules, probably two street dogs making love from a child’s perspective and an old guy’s perspective.. Probably or probably not. It depends.

225 Comments to “Creative Writing 101: Sunset”

  1. bxjubahji says:

    nice photo you’ve got there. if it’s on the Philippines, then the sun sets beautifully on every corners of your country.

  2. voodoots says:

    WOW! the photo reminds me of the documentary, The Journey of Man, by Jared Diamond. Beautiful!

  3. Mon says:

    This is a nice post Ax. I learned something. and great shot! ikaw kumuha nyan? galeng naman. *inggit mode* =)

    • Ax says:

      hindi ako, classmate ko. point and shoot lang yan.. tapos inedit ni jayr.

    • amiah =) says:

      ako kumuha nyan ^_^ wahahaha…
      sbi ko na nga ba eh may career ako sa photography…
      using my ever reliable canon ixus 970IS…
      i really love watching the sunset…
      sayang lang i left it when we went to ilocos last june…
      maganda din sna sunset dun T_T
      I also have one when we were in boracay last nov.

      next stop…sunset ng kota kinabalu! =)

      thanx ax for sharing my photo.
      I really appreciate the feed backs…

      • Ax says:

        i’ll be there on kota kinabalu. what a coincidence, we may be beside each other on the plane?!

        haha.

        sige, gusto ko yan. excited na ako. argh.

        no problem!

        ow, when you thanked me on this comment, you are ‘just’ like Fauxx. I don’t know. Fauxx sometimes brings the best out of me when he says ‘thank you’ or ‘good job.’ haha.

        • Wolf says:

          san na passport number mo? i-edit ko pa kaya e-ticket natin? bahala ka kapag nakalimutan ko na yun…

          at si Amiah: edited yan :D

          walang sunset tayong inabutan sa Ilocos dahil nasa van na tayo that time… at in-love ka pa nun XP

          at parang nakalimutan nyo na pupunta rin tayong Brunei. Pero, oo nga, isang araw lang kasi tayo dun..

          PS: Hindi ba nila mabasa ang nasa picture? Para tanungin ka nila kung ikaw ang kumuha????
          LOL

  4. Ax says:

    That experience won me a magazine courtesy of Dong Ho’s Eskapo.

    Just comment any of road trip experiences, here is mine:

    mahapdi na ang mga mata ko habang nakasakay sa bangka kasama ang apat pang kaibigan. galing kami sa isla ng anawangin. nakatitig ako sa papalubog na araw, sa nagkalat na ulap na kulay dugo, at ang pagtalsik ng tubig ang pawang nagpapalamig sa katawan ko. gandang ganda ako sa haring araw na nais ng matulog, at bigla bigla ay may tumalon na isang dolphin.

    kung pumikit ako ng oras na iyon, siguro magsisisi ako buong buhay ko.

  5. marx says:

    that’s why i wanna have my own camera. i wanted to capture pictures too. with elegance of course and meaning as it is. where did you shoot this one?

  6. jasn says:

    i really liked the photo. it feels like im one of them, silently being fascinated by the luxurious essence of the whole scenario. Its like droplets of the golden sun, ready to form a vigilant substance that will occupy my restless mind. I can still reminisce that moment when I last picture the sunset using my own vision..

    in other words. im speechless..

  7. euford says:

    wow ax.. i really love sunsets..ganda ng photo na yan,, pag umuuwi ako dito sa la union galing ng dagupan ito ung hinahanap ko.. every afternoon din nasa tabing dagat ako wathing the sunset.. thanks.. ganda nito..

    • Ax says:

      aw. every summer means La Union nung bata ako! hehe.

      really? we are just some tires away sa beach ng la union.. we sometimes celebrates nothing day sa beach kasama ang buong angkan namin. hehe.

      no problem! and thanks also!

  8. timangkey says:

    well, everything is all about perspective. For me, nothing is absolute.

    about, the sun. here is my not so creative writing:

    Oh the sun is beautiful and i am happy.

    Oh the sun is beutiful but i am sad.

    wehehehe

  9. J.Kulisap says:

    In bliss, there was hope to see the sunshine
    In gloom, the last sailing was bound to end.
    Your innocence, your fear, your future.

    I couldn’t say more words, the photograhp is enough to unleash the ominous part in me. If there is light, how could you convince the not so innocent mind, there is an end? Where is the beginning?

    PS.
    What is the title of the book? I want to purchase too.

  10. hehehe pay per click ba yan nasa post?

  11. yang mga ganyang sunset, lagi ko nakikita yan dito sa island…

  12. dencios says:

    interesting book.

    nice image.

    btw ax di mo na kelangan pa ng ganyang book, creative ka na e

    • Ax says:

      Maganda yung book, nakakastimulate. Aw. Stimulate!

      Salamat. Yung image, di ako kumuha niyan, classmate ko.

      Haha, at salamat ulit. Nagbasa ako kase baka marami pa akong hindi alam. Hehe.

      Salamat, kuya Dencio. Magbukas ka lang ng blog, papakyawin ko ang comment section!

  13. mtoni says:

    typical na tanawin yan sa zambales.

    sa hapon habang unti unting papalubog ang araw ay naguunahan naman sa pagahon ang mga mangingisda mula sa dagat.

    • Ax says:

      Sobrang saya nung nagpunta kami ng Zambales. Kahit walang pera, masaya pa din.

      Hindi namin napuntahan yung Capones Island, balak ko rin bumalik don ulit.

      Kulang ang panahon. Sarap balik balikan.. Sarap ulit ulitin.

      (Alam ko, may sasabihin si Kuya Jesse, haha.)

      • mtoni says:

        malapit sa tabing dagat ung location ng bukid sa zambales at tanaw ung 3 isla.
        kung sa capones kayo magagawi marami rami na magagandang resort don ngaun at kung me time maari din umakyat sa kalapit bundok.

        noon marami tiga manila nakikituloy sa mismong bahay sa bukid at sa mga kubo tinatayo sa tabing dagat ng mga tiyo ko para menos sa bayad at mula don nagpapahatid sila sa capones.

  14. sandi says:

    Magandang Araw Ax!

    ang kulay ng langit sa litrato ay parang nagbabadyang may darating na isang bagyo

    • Ax says:

      Naging maayos naman Kuya Sandi ang gabi pagkatapos ng paglubog ng araw. Nag star gazing pa kami.

      At nanood ng alon sa kalaliman ng gabi!

  15. Ate Joyo says:

    The sunset always makes me think of myself. Every evening, the sun sets on roughly seven billion people. I evaluate my own life in relation to those many others. My problems, cares, and woes seem small and petty to me, and I feel guilty for stressing over such trivial problems compared the serious problems other people have to deal with. It is a humbling, and slightly depressing, yet strangely comforting, experience. Comforting in the sense that while the sun is setting on those people with “real” problems, it does not fail to set on me, and show me its beauty. God sends his love to all his children, no matter how trivial they seem.

    • Ax says:

      As the sun sets in this area, somewhere in some part of the globe, the sun rises.

      And we share the same setting and rising of the sun at the same time.. you and me in a different place. in a different perspective.

  16. Mr. Nonsense says:

    eto raw ang poem ni jason tungkol jan. here we go at walang iyakan:
    ru ru ru ur boot
    gintlee dawn de strim
    merilee merilee merilee merilee
    layp is butt e dreem…

  17. Mr. Nonsense says:

    yung nakatayo eh parang ako rin sa umaga…mahaba rin ang silhouette nung akin sa paggising…

  18. wes says:

    nosebleed.. cool. hehehe. yudamen!

  19. yhen says:

    wat i like about the sunset is that it creates a warmth feeling that not even a sunset can compare…

    nwei, love the shot ax… very nice one.

  20. taribong says:

    Beautiful indeed.

    You have once again proven your God-given talent in creative writing. Thanks for sharing!!!
    (it also reminds me of the movie Vantage Point)

    • Ax says:

      Bakit di ko alam yang mga movie na yan?! Aw.

      Hm, mapanood nga yang mga yan.. or baka napanood ko na, di ko lang alam na yun na pala yown. Hehe.

      Salamat, Kuya Bong!

  21. wow! nasa photography na rin si amiah! nice amiah..

  22. eli says:

    ang ganda ng picture.

  23. bipolarsisa says:

    wow. ;)

    creative indeed. talented ka talaga Kuya Ax!

  24. davin says:

    ganda ng pic…
    galing ng description ng sunset as perceived by two different characters. nice :)

  25. tsenn` says:

    same old coffee table blog ni ginoong ax mula ng huli akong mapadpad dito. heehee. gusto kong itry un “fleshing out a stranger you have seen the first time”. hmm-

    • Ax says:

      yep, try mo yun! nakakatuwa, kahit sa isip lang or kung may kasama ka kwentuhan mo siya ng kung anong nasa isip mo about ‘that’ stranger. Nakakatuwa!

      • tsenn` says:

        ilan beses mo na natry?? hehe sige magawa bukas pagpasok ko, sana maalala ko.

        pero parang mas masarap siyang gawin sa pampasaherong bus o kaya sa gitna ng mall. waah naeexcite ako :)

        • Ax says:

          kahit saan pwede mo naman yan gawin.. sa isip ko lang ginagawa.. minsan pag may kausap. this was an exercise pero ginagawa na namin dati ng mga classmates ko not knowing, this is creative thinking. hoho.

          sige lang, try lang ng try at paganahin ang utak!

  26. orville says:

    galing ah.. gustong gusto ko ring kumukuha ng mga ganyang pics.. eto nga sa bago kong post dagat din at may bangka.. ewan ko ba ang sarap kasi s pakiramdam pag nakakakita ako ng ganyan..

    • Ax says:

      ah, oks! dagat at bangka din pala ang theme ng bago mong post! hehe. yep, masaya nga makakita ng ganyang senaryo!

      • orville says:

        hehe oo nga… sa amin kasi normal lang na nakakakita ng ganyan… pag medyo bad trip ako, punta ako at tambay.. hehe.. thanks nga pala sa paalala u sa akin na lagyan ko ng watermark. minsan kasi nakaklimutan ko or tinatamad ako.. hehe.. pero dapat talaga meron.. hehe.. gagawin ko un…

  27. topexpress says:

    I love the pic! astig ang pagkaka kuha mo AX!

    i like it both sunrise and sunset, though im a sunrise person…. ^_^ gulo bah?!

    Ano pla ang camera mo na gamit? i mean model?

    pagpatuloy mo lang Ax, may future ka! pag uwi ko sama tayo sa mga kakibigan kong professional photographers. :D

    • Ax says:

      Haha, salamat po sa compliment sa photo, pero yung kaibigan ko po ang kumuha! Hehe. Ako, I think I’m a sunset person!

      Ixus 970IS po iyan, edited lang po kaya ganyan!

  28. joan says:

    ..ganda ng kuha. :D

    ..at lam ko may talent ka tlaga on writing.. just keep on going. :)

  29. J.Kulisap says:

    Si Davin at Mtoni ba ay si Ax din?

    Walang bakat.Bakat?

  30. euford says:

    hai kua ang ganda ng sunset na blog mo aus kang bloger pan mo aqoh kau hahahahah

    http:///wwweuford-euford.blogspot.com/

  31. julxe says:

    ganda nga nung shot.. pero wow ung editing.. galing! hmmm kung ako ang magde-describe ng sunset ganito ko iyon ilalarawan..

    PINAGHALONG KABA’T UTOT DULOT NG SUMABOG NA NITROGEN BOMB NA HINDI INAKALANG LILIKHA NG ISANG OBRANG MAMALASIN NG MGA PANGKARANIWANG NILALANG NA WALANG PAMBILI NG YOSI SA ISANG HAPON.

    • Ax says:

      That’s why I wanted us to be a team on every Journalism activities way back high school.

      And we excel on Filipino language mode of communication.

      • julxe says:

        I know right!!!

        …nagpapaka-dalubhasa ka na sa Ingles kasi eh.. kaya ayan mag-Filipino naman tayo! Mag-enrol kaya tayo ng MALIKHAING PAGSULAT sa UP.. hehehe ano sa tingin mo? Tsaka teka nakakasawa din mag-Ingles… palibhasa hindi ka nag-call center! hehehehe

        • Ax says:

          Haha, seriously, I think I do need to enhance this writing ability of mine.. I am still thinking about it. Considering ‘my everyday schedule’ and the ‘money,’ of course.. I can’t make it.

          The lack of my drive to study, I make amends with apportioning some of my time reading books about creative writing. :)

  32. bluguy says:

    madalas pag ako nagsusulat….isang bagay o tao lang ang subject ko at dito ko pinapaikot ang kwento….mas masarap at fulfilling ang makapagsulat tungkol sa isang tao na di mo naman talaga kilala…..mas malaya ka kasing makapag-express ng iyong diwa…

  33. orville says:

    ahm ok lang un.. basta matutunan ko.. hehe.. di ko kasi kors ang computer..

  34. lovely says:

    pwede bang mag pa tuitor ng english sayo ax hehe..

  35. Dorm Boy says:

    Hmmm sa anawangin pala yan! I had a sad story about it… nag-aya pumunta ang mga officemates ko last summer mag-anawangin, hindi ako sumama, sayang super ganda daw dun!

    Anyway i hope this year makapunta ako dun and see the sunset! Gogogogo!

    • Ax says:

      Yep, from Anawangin going back to Pundaquit.

      Sobrang ganda ng lugar, magiging emosyonal ka. Haha, pero seriously, ganda ng place.

      This year, wishing you opportunity to visit the place. Gogogogo!

  36. Allen says:

    napaka-galing! Never had formal education in writing at di ko alam na magandang exercise pala yan. very well written! bravo!!!!!!

  37. dencios says:

    ax,

    ang daming tao. nahilo ako kakabasa ng mga comments haha

    :3

  38. jasn says:

    puff the magic dregon lived by the sea.

    good morning akso!

  39. orville says:

    ax nga pala total mabait ka naman at mapagbigay eh pati na rin paglagay ng header sa blog ko paturo. hehe..

  40. ax, kailan mo huling nakita ang sunset?

  41. taga-bundok says:

    ahahaha! mag-co-comment muna ako sa mgha comments…
    napakasaya talaga ng usapan dito… gosh, si kulisap nag-english.

    ganda ng pic… may kakaibang dala sa aking mga mata at pakiramdam… ewan ko… basta…magbabasa na nga ako ng post, :D

  42. taga-bundok says:

    wow… ang galeng. two different point of views, of different emotions…

    bookstore slash libary, er… ano nga bang bookstore yan? yan yung kulay blue… di ko maalala. red yung NBS diba. teka… :)

    magandang araw Ax! :)

  43. ax, alam mo ba ung story ng three wishes?

  44. J.Kulisap says:

    Panawagan kay Mtoni,

    Mag-iwan ka ng bakas o bakat, magtutuos tayo.

    Sino man ang may-ari ng blog na ito, salamat sa iyo.

  45. frances says:

    nice!. :)) blog walking

  46. Jerald says:

    Discussing this between me and my manager, we would have to say this is an overly informative post that deserves mentioning elsewhere. This is for 2 types of writers: current writers who are considering another career, and people trying to prefer to become a writer.

  47. […] to do it when I suddenly remembered something. Familiar kasi ito sa post ni Kuya Ax sa blog nya (LINK HERE) . So then I found out na ito nga din yung book na binabasa nya. […]

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